Friday, January 9, 2009

Poetry Friday

The Veteran
by Dorothy Parker

When I was young and bold and strong,
Oh, right was right, and wrong was wrong!
My plume on high, my flag unfurled,
I rode away to right the world.
"Come out, you dogs, and fight!" said I,
And wept there was but once to die.

But I am old; and good and bad
Are woven in a crazy plaid.
I sit and say, "The world is so;
And he is wise who lets it go.
A battle lost, a battle won --
The difference is small, my son."

Inertia rides and riddles me;
The which is called Philosophy.



If When my book gets published, I think I'd like this poem at the beginning.

And I was so worried...


I have been afraid that my MG fantasy ms. was too dark. The ending's not entirely happy, and, well, let's just say there's a bit of blood at the end.

I am, apparently, not as hardcore as I thought I was.

First there was my mother, who read the completed ms. over break (she'd only read the first few early draft chapters). My mother reads super-sweet romance novels for fun and teaches fifth graders. She is not hardcore. She is something of a pansy.

"Did you like it?" I asked anxiously.

"Yeah, it was good." She's all casual.

"Not too dark?" My butt is on the edge of the seat.

"What was dark about it?"

"Mom! People get their hearts ripped out!"

"Yeah, but just a little."

Mom also assures me that her fifth graders would not mind the dark ending in the least. But still, I worried.

Then I started The Hunger Games.

I'm only about 30 pages in.

But I am not at all worried any more about my book being too dark any more!

Thursday, January 8, 2009

This is How to Critique

just kidding! :)

In all actuality, I've been thinking about critiques a lot lately, in part because I used them so much in re-writing, in part because my stack of TBC (to be critiqued) is growing daily :)

I think that I am more nit-picky than most people, and I blame my education for that. I'm old-school English lit major/teacher. I am used to making my students' papers bleed with my terrifying red pen; I have the reputation in school for pounding kids with essays (although many students have come back to me in the past thanking me for it).

So I do point out more grammar issues than I have seen from other crit members, and I do focus on things like word choice and language on a more minute level than is probably wanted by the person I am critiquing. I am trying to work on that, I promise.

However, my critiquing style also come from my own experience. The Amnesia Door is the 9th manuscript that I've written. The ninth. Two of them are un-save-ably bad, they are under the bed and they are staying there. Six of them are decent. One of them made it all the way to the acquiring committee at Random House, and although one editor wanted it, it was ultimately voted down.

And that rejection hurt. I felt like I was tripping at the finish line, that I was almost there, then sent back to the beginning.

The acquiring editor at RH was nice enough to send me a very extensive letter of feedback with the reasons why it ultimately wasn't right for RH and what should have been different. I showed the letter to my mom. "Oh," she said, "I thought that, too, you totally should have changed X." I showed the letter to my (then) fiance. "Yeah, I always thought Y should be Z." I showed the letter to the close friends who'd read the manuscript for me. "We didn't know why you didn't write W instead of V; we figured you knew what you were doing."

They all agreed with the editorial letter; they all had secretly felt that those changes (which were significant, such as POV, age of characters, resolution of the plot) should have been made, but none of them said anything. All I got back was smiley faces and "You can do it!" and "It's perfect the way it is!"

Now, this is my fault--I went to people who would inevitably give me positive feedback (relatives, friends). And, to be fair, I myself may not have been mature enough to take critical feedback for what it's worth.

But this is why I always try to point out everything that I think could potentially trip a person up when submitting to an agent or editor. Not because I'm a meanie, but because that is exactly how I want to be treated. Now, I seek out the harshest criticism I can find. I beg anyone and everyone to read my stuff, and in crit groups, I will sometimes go back to members and dig deeper--not because I'm a masochist, but because I want to know every little thing that can be changed. And I do believe in treating others the same way that you would like to be treated, so I do give as honest critical feedback that I possibly can.

I have only been a member of a crit group for a year, and I've come to realize that I do need to tone it down a bit--for time's sake, but also because there is a point where I can be too critical. Sometimes (probably often-times) it's the big picture critique that helps the most. I find myself skimming over comments on word choice and specifics in a sentence or a paragraph, but major revisions have stemmed from comments on bigger things, like plot, voice, characterization.

I think I've lost whatever point I was going to start off making. I guess it's just this: everyone critiques differently. Some are nitpicky (like me) some are supportive (like my mom). In the end, it's good to get many different opinions and many different sides of the story so that when you revise, you can consider others and thereby become more critical of yourself.

How do you critique? What are the most helpful kinds of critiques to you?

PS: This post in no way reflects anything about anyone's work that I am currently critiquing, now or in the future. I just found myself being very reflexive of my own critique practices and though I'd share.

Wednesday, January 7, 2009

You Know It'll Work When...

...the idea just won't let you go.

This is a crappy time of the year for me. This week = final exam reviews and kids frantically writing their 6-page final essays. This weekend = reading 65 student essays and grading them. Next week = administering 3 different final exams. Next weekend = grading 65 final exams. Weekend after that = planning for and beginning and entirely new semester with new kids and (for the first time in five years) a new course that I've never taught before.

So, yeah, I'm tapping the gin bottle soon.

But no one cares about that. Here's what I'm really writing about:

Recently, I met a writer friend at a coffee shop to discuss our manuscripts. She read a scene where one of the characters (Ms. Wendt, the witchly teacher) gets angry. She pointed out that Ms. Wendt's anger is pretty mild and dropped quickly. This isn't the first time that I've heard that before, so as soon as she said it, I started thinking of ways to make that scene better. After all, she a pissed off witch--surely she can do more than yell!

An image started forming (she gets so angry she catches on fire), but it was a bit vague, so I just let it sit around in my brain all weekend. Then school started up, and I still kind of had it all in the back of my head, but I wasn't writing anything--I was too exhausted from school. Then we had a staff meeting that was mind-numbingly boring, and I started doodling because, let's be honest, I certainly wasn't going to do anything so crazy as pay attention.

And what I doodled was that scene that had been bouncing around my brain.

When an idea grabs you on one day and is coming out of your fingers in sketches half a week later, you know you've got a good scene.

So I'm not going to play around here. I'm going to go write that scene!

Nine Inch Nails Agree with Me

I'm sorry. I know I said I'd drop it, but...

Yesterday, the husband showed me a link to an article about Nine Inch Nails. NIN had recently released a new album (titled Ghosts I-IV) electronically. Under the Creative Commons license. Which means: they were giving it away.

And now it is number 1 on the Amazon albums sold lis
t:

Forget about the deluxe artwork and the high-priced, limited-edition extras; Reznor actually sold more copies of the basic Ghosts I-IV albums through Amazon's MP3 store than did any other act in 2008. He beat out Coldplay, Death Cab for Cutie, Vampire Weekend, Beck, and hundreds of others, and he did it without a label and by giving the music away.
Here's what happened: People downloaded it for free. Some liked it and bought it--the rising culture of Gen Y today realizes appreciation = $ and are willing to pay for it (look at the recent donations being thrown at Wikipedia--in the millions; look at the success of freeware online). Sure, some never spent a penny on it--but they listened to it, and shared it with their friends, and they bought it. And any way you look at it, NIN eventually rose to be number 1--based on a free product.

Footnote: this isn't the first time this happened. As Michael Ayers points out in his recent blog post:
When they self-released “In Rainbows” back in October of 2007, they told fans they could pay anything they wanted- in a download format only. It was a sliding scale, based on how much you think Radiohead’s record is worth to you, and you got it.
Now, I know this isn't a music blog, it's a writing one. But the music industry is the best model for the publishing industry. Literary agent Caren Johnson cross posted Michael Ayers post about whether or not publishing can learn from the music industry:
...when the [music] industry had to make a decision about the future- at the beginning of this decade- they balked. Instead of embracing models of online distribution, they retaliated with suing fans, putting restrictions on the digital playback options, or even worse, continued thinking about the bottom line, instead of the quality of their product, or quality of their artist.
While I agree paper books won't ever go away, I also believe that whichever publisher first embraces ebooks in an efficient way will become the iPod of publishing....and what publisher wouldn't want that?

ETA: GalleyCat posted an update to this topic in their post from yesterday: and here's and interesting way to use ebooks to market that I'd not thought of, but do think would be effective.

Tuesday, January 6, 2009

I Have Seen the Future...


...and it is palm-sized.

The husband done good for Christmas: an iPod Touch (aka iTouch). And it is fun. But it's also a little dangerous. See, you can download applications directly onto the iTouch. A checkers game? Done. More music? Downloaded. An e-reader? Done and done.

There's been a lot of noise about Kindle and how it will take over the electronic reading market. But Kindle costs $500 a pop, [ETA: they're now $359...recession?] they're relatively big, and they only do one thing: download and show books. iTouch is the future. iTouch costs between $280 (16gig) and $215 (8gig), fits in your pocket, and does everything: music, video, interwebs, picture viewing, etc. In other words: the kids will want one.

And you can download a program called Stanza that is an effective e-reader for iTouch. Many books (all classics, read: all mostly boring) are available for free through Stanza. [For a comparison between Kindle and iTouch+Stanza, check out this article]

This, not Kindle, is the future for e-readers. Portability, versatility, cost effectiveness. The iTouch with Stanza will have the same effect on books that the iPod did with music. This is the future, ladies and gentlemen, this is where electronic text is going.

But let's be honest--a complete free copy of Shakespeare's plays ain't gonna do much for most people. They want, say, Twilight.

And here's where my problem begins.

While the (boring) classics are free, the new, popular books are not. And they are rather pricey. An electronic copy of Twilight costs almost as much as a hard copy. In general, electronic copies aren't more than a buck or two cheaper (if that). And check out this article: the Amazon hardcover price of a book was actually cheaper than the electronic version!

And that ain't right.

I'm not the only one who thinks so: a recent Galley Cat article pointed out that readers tend to reject overpriced e-books.

Diatribe over, here's what I think the future really holds for e-books to be profitable and a success:
  • e-readers must be versatile and affordable (such as iTouch)
  • e-books should never cost more than $5
  • free e-book downloads should be included with the purchase price of a book (after all, I can rip music into my mp3 player after I buy a CD)
I know that I've ranted on this subject before, but...*sigh*. I'm a techie and a reader, and feel like we're this close to really making a breakthrough with electronic books. But things like overpriced readers (Kindle, I'm looking at you) and overpriced e-books (grrr...) just hold back the development of this market.

What do you think?

Monday, January 5, 2009

Awards and linkspam!

Oh, argh. Starting back to school already?! Blegh.

But here's a bit of sunshine on my (urgh!) first day back:

Tabitha nominated me for the Butterfly Award!
(which is doubly awesome as I love butterflies and used them as a theme to my wedding)

The Butterfly Award rules:

1. Put the logo on your blog.
2. Add a link to the person who awarded you.
3. Award up to 10 other blogs.
4. Add links to those blogs on yours.
5. Leave a message for your awardees on their blogs.

So, in return, I nominate:
Justus: if you have a baby and a writing career, you deserve every award out there
Lois: you just got a new blog, now you need some awards to pimp it with!
Christine: I'm beta reading her work, and trust me, she deserves an award for it :)
Vivian: I got the ARCs for winning the drawing on her blog, and it totally made my Christmas break awesome!


Anyway, linkspam:

Books + art = tattoos?

Just finished Graceling (book review to come soon), and was very happy to see that the next book comes out this year...and will probably be added to my fifty for 2009.

Angela Cerrito has a new writing challenge (with a critique prize) over on her blog.

Justine Larbalestier is giving writing advice. Go. Ask. Learn.

A new writing opportunity for short stories in YA/MG/just cool stuff.

Why did I never notice this before? Query Tracker seems like an awesome why to acquire and organize data on agents for queries.

I think one of my fifty in 2009 will be a Class of 2k9 book...

This may only interest me, but here's the new Doctor Who, funny hair and all. And I do like this new Cullen-mockery of him!

Sunday, January 4, 2009

How I Revised

OK, I promise, I'm almost done with this topic. How many times can I beat a dead horse anyway, right? :)

Anyway, I thought it might interest some about how I went about with these revisions, especially those (like me) who find revisions so very difficult.

First, I had some great feedback from beta readers. The very first people to read it were those who I knew would give me positive feedback and assure me that what I had here was a book, not a pile of wordy-crap. My mother, the husband, and a critique member who gives great positive feedback were my first readers. My mother loves everything I write without question. My crit member pointed out specifics in language and phrases. The husband gives me assurance that I am worth something; his feedback tends to be honest but supportive, and he challanges me not on plot or characterization, but in direction (i.e. he always wants me to write an anti-hero with a bad ending, not a happily ever after).

Second, I took the feedback to the next critical level. I've got two crit groups, and put my work to them, at least in the first few chapters, to get a sense of what worked/didn't in the plot. This helped me identify specifics about weak characterization, slow pacing, plot holes, and overused words.

From this point forward, I attacked revisions two-fold. One for language, one for plot.

Language
  1. Went to Wordle and identified overused words. I blogged about it here, but ended up not going chapter by chapter with Wordle, as was my original intent. Doing the first three chapters separately, and then the entire ms. was enough.
  2. Then, using the words I discovered as overused in Wordle and the words that my various crit groups and beta readers helped me to identify as overused, I went through my document highlighting, bolding, underlining, and color-coding each example of an overused word. I did this using Word and the Replace function: I took each word, had Word find it and replace it with that word in bold, italics, underline, and a specific color to that word. Basically, I did this for the overused words I mentioned ealier, but I also did it for the combination "ly" to help me find adverbs, and am considering doing it for "ing" to help me attack weak gerunds.
  3. I then printed the color-coded manuscript, each page splashed with a bright over-used or weak word.
  4. I read through the entire manuscript. And although I did read every single word (and caught a few grammatical errors along the way), I focused more on the color-coded words. My eyes jumped naturally to them, but more importantly, they helped me to identify where my weaknesses lay. I had whole paragraphs where every verb in the paragraph was "was". It wasn't something I'd noticed before, and not something I noticed in the plain version of my manuscript, but it jumped out at me when it was color-coded. I apparently have a weak-word blindness in my own writing--I'm not aware that I do it, and I don't see it after it's done. I had to seek out and highlight those words specifically in order to catch them all.
  5. After going through the entire manuscript by hand using the color coded method, I then went back to the computer and changed the manuscript based on my written notes. It was tedious, but easier for me make the corrections on paper than on screen.
Plot
  1. I started with feedback from others. I am blind to my own work, so I sent it out to anyone who even looked liked they'd be remotely interested in even thinking about maybe taking a look at it. I didn't stand on a street corner and solicit strangers to read my work, but I did consider it.
  2. I treated my manuscript like a sick child: I always got a second opinion. If one critique member said one thing (unless it was obviously right or obviously not where I wanted to go with the manuscript), I went to someone else, preferably someone who had no connection with the first person, and asked specific questions. For example, the husband didn't like the way Chapter 1 ended, he thought it was too mild. So then I took it to a crit member, asked her to read Chapter 1 and included some specific questions, such as "Is the end too mild?" This gave me a more rounded opinion on things. If two people agreed on a point, I rewrote the scene. This does not mean I kept it that way--I just rewrote the scene, then compared them both in my head, then made a decision. Sometimes, the rewritten stuff was better. Sometimes it wasn't. Either way, I took the suggestions as seriously as I could, tried new angles, and forced myself to have a perspective about change.
  3. I put the entire manuscript in Scrivener. I think I might have had an easier time of things had I started with the program, but as it was, I did something that I advice my writing students to do with long essays: a backward outline. Everything was written without an outline. But once the manuscript was done, I made an outline (using the Corkboard function in Scrivener), and then got a close look at it from there. Doing so enabled me to six chapters into three--I realized there was so little of a scene change, that there was really no point in not combining them. I also completely cut an entire chapter after doing the outline and realizing that the only thing that happened was the kids went to point A, dithered around a bit, and left. That's a chapter full of nothing, so I cut the whole thing.
And that's what I did! It was a massive undertaking, I won't lie. I've never worked so hard at a revision. That said, it did seem to work in the end.

So, what nifty ways of editing and revising do you use?

Saturday, January 3, 2009

Catching up....

...on comments on this blog and everyone else's! I should be back to speed soon.

Friday, January 2, 2009

A Comparison

First Draft
Total length: 75k words
Overused words (and the number of times I used them):
  • hissed = 21
  • just =286
  • asked = 234
  • were =359
  • had = 584
  • said = 748
  • that = 1087
  • was = 1207
Revised Draft
Total length: 68,500 words (cut 6,500 words)
Overused words:
  • hissed = 8 (cut 13--this was mostly just a chapter 1 problem)
  • just = 171 (cut 115)
  • asked = 211 (cut 23--but I'm OK with that number)
  • were = 270 (cut 89--I'm a little disappointed in that number)
  • had = 472 (cut 112)
  • said = 567 (cut 181--but shocked I still have this many)
  • that = 663 (cut 424--but again, shocked I still have so many)
  • was = 888 (cut 319. Man, those "was" suckers just creep right in.)
Thoughts
I have very mixed feelings about this. I do think I made the book tighter. I cut several chapters, combined several more, met my goal in cutting length. And I thought I was doing better on tightening the actual language--and although I cut almost a third of the "was"es and almost half of the "that"s, I still worry that the language itself isn't tight enough.

So...I'm going to set it aside. I'm too close now to be objective. I want to send this off to every agent I can find--and I've already begun looking--but instead, I am going to spend the next few weeks, maybe the next month, researching agents and getting the good list...but before I send off, I'm doing one last read-through of the novel to make sure it really is tight, complete, and the best that I can do.

A Year In Review

Got this meme from Kristin Cashore, author of Graceling, which I'm in the process of reading. I took some of the questions off just because they didn't apply. I tag anyone who wants to do it!

1. What did you do in 2008 that you'd never done before?

Start a blog! I can't believe it's less than a year old...and it's been much more fun (and rewarding) than I ever expected.

2. What are your New Year's resolutions for 2009?
See previous post :)

3. What countries did you visit?
England and France

4. What would you like to have in 2009 that you lacked in 2008?
A white Christmas! And a published book with my name on it.

5. What date from 2008 will remain etched upon your memory, and why?
I'm terrible with numbers, so I don't remember the date. But the day I found out I got National Boards (in teaching) was pretty sweet.

6. What was your biggest success?
National Boards in my teaching world, finishing The Amnesia Door in my writing world. Actually, not just finishing it, but also growing up enough as a writer to realize it needs change, seek out feedback, and apply criticism to revisions. Previously, I have been too quick to think I was done after typing The End, too willing to forgo serious revisions.

7. What was your biggest failure?
I wasted time with too much nothing.

8. Did you suffer illness or injury?
Thankfully, no.

9. What was the best thing you bought?
The husband's Christmas present--he really liked it! Also, I recently got this at an after Christmas sale, it is freaking awesome. Hmmm...I also like the books I bought this year...

10. Where did most of your money go?
Travel and writing (which includes books in my genre/age range for "research")

11. What did you get really, really, really excited about?
The election! Traveling to Europe with a gaggle of teenagers under my supervision! My own book! Reading and discovering new authors!

12. Compared to this time last year, are you a. happier or sadder? b. thinner or fatter? c. richer or poorer?
a. happier, b. no difference, c. richer--at least in security, happiness, peace, etc.

13. What do you wish you'd done more of?
Write.

14. What do you wish you'd done less of?
Procrastinate.

15. Did you fall in love in 2008?
I fell more in love with the husband as we crossed our one year anniversary, more in love with my parents as I grow up and appreciate them more, more in love with my friends who stand beside me even when I become self absorbed, more in love with my dog who loves me more than anything, more in love with my life as I achieve my dreams, more in love with my God who gave it all to me.

16. Do you hate anyone now that you didn't hate this time last year?
No, although I do have a friend who's really let me down, and I'm afraid our long friendship dissolve.

17. What was your favorite TV program?
Doctor Who! The perfect Doctor (David Tennant) and the perfect companion (Catherine Tate). And a brilliant plot line!

18. What was the best book you read?
My eyes have grown wide. How can I pick one? Let's see...I loved The Emerald Tablet because I loved knowing the author and feeling that connection between the writing world and the reading world. The Harry Potter books--that I read and re-read--are brilliant and something for me to aspire to.

19. What was your greatest musical discovery?
Nickel Creek, and the song "The Lighthouse". Very cool sounds.

20. What was your favorite film of this year?
Hancock was great. Did I am Legend come out this year? Apparently I love Will Smith.

21. What did you want and get?
A deeper sense of belonging in the writing world. I wanted to feel more like a writer, not a hack.

22. What did you want and not get?
A published book with my name on it.

23. What one thing would have made your year immeasurably more satisfying?
A published book with my name on it. (I see a theme here.)

24. How would you describe your personal fashion concept in 2008?
*snort*

25. What kept you sane?
The husband.

26. Tell us a valuable life lesson you learned in 2008.
Let it be.

Predictions for 2010

*puts on sparkly scarf, gypsy skirt, and lights some incense*

Yessss....I see many things in the future of publishing.

  1. YA (especially speculative YA) will continue to be very popular.
  2. Vampires will be less so. Many people think angels are going to be the new vampires, but I'm leaning towards some totally new fad. I don't think angels are going to last all year. Probably not werewolves or zombies either. But something new and different. Maybe a YA version of Rick Riordan's demi-gods, or something like that.
  3. Science fiction and steampunk are going to continue to rise in popularity. 
  4. YA is going to grow more intelligent. Less GossipGirl/Snarky/PopularMeanGirl stuff, more stuff where the plot is based on something you have to think about and less where the plot is based on people (girls) being mean to each other.
  5. Romantic triangles will continue to be popular, but the plot of a book is going to need more than a romantic triangle in order to survive in the future.
  6. YA is going to remain the genre where you can experiment--new, fun, exciting things will happen in YA more than adult literature, and it will be much better for it. 
  7. YA will increasingly become more accepted as a distinct genre style, not a target age range. As it should be.

Thursday, January 1, 2009

A New Year, a New Beginning

Ha! A pun! With the new year came the end of revisions...or at least, what I consider to be the end of revisions. And as I turned over the very last page of my manuscript, bleeding with red ink and changes, I turned right back to page one.

See, I've always had trouble with the first page of the manuscript--which isn't that great of a thing considering that of all the pages of a manuscript, page one is arguably the most important. Without a knock-out page one, I can't sell the blasted thing.

But then again, the last page is important, too. And the second biggest problem people have with my manuscript is the last page. But after submerging myself in revisions for EIGHT STRAIGHT HOURS NOT EVEN PAUSING FOR SUSTENANCE, I came up with a new beginning for the new year!

I know some of you are probably sick of reading versions of my work, but I'm a writer, which means I will mooch feedback from wherever I can possibly glean it from. Besides, it's short :) Anyway, here's the just-off-the-press, I'll-probably-regret-this-later new first bit. Right now, my biggest worry is that a) it's not attention-grabbing enough, and b) it uses the word "change" too often. Oh, and c) that if I try to thrust another version of the first page at anyone else, one of my readers will paper-cut me to death.

Change had never done Belle Ravenna any favors. Moving from one coast to another last year had meant change: a new school, a new house, and no friends. But the first day of school was all about change—and maybe this would be the year things would finally change for the better. The start of eighth grade would give Belle the chance to reinvent herself, finally become the person she wanted to be.

Someone knocked into Belle as she picked up a chocolate milk. Ashleigh. Belle's corndog slid off her fries. The stick end landed in the ketchup.

"I hate it when the nobodies just stand there," Ashleigh said to the lunchroom in general. She paid for her salad, no dressing, and bottle of water.

"I hate it that you think you can just walk all over me," Belle told her corndog.

So much for reinventing herself. All that had changed since last year was her grade.

"$2.60." The lunch lady didn't look up as she held out her hand.

Belle handed her three dollars. "Have you ever wondered if maybe life should be different from how it is?"

"Change." The lunch lady handed the coins to Belle.

Belle stuffed them in her pocket, picked up the tray, and stepped into the lunchroom and its chaos. ...
Thanks in advance for any comments any one can provide--and please, don't hold back! And, as a special thank-you for helping me out with this manuscript and sharing this crazy ride of a blog and a manuscript development, I'm making a special pre-announcement: I'll be holding a contest very soon just for you, my wonderful, amazing blog readers!

PS: Thanks to Christine, who gave me the phrase "reinventing herself" during my Amnesia Door Chapter 1 Critique Revisionrama! :)

Wednesday, December 31, 2008

Trends I've Seen in Revisions

  • Whenever I write "that + verb", I could have just written the participle instead. (Example: "They went to the doors that led outside" vs. "They went to the doors leading outside.")
  • Whenever I follow "So-and-so said" with a sentence, I could just cut the said and make one sentence. ("You do it," Belle said. She nodded towards Robert. --> "You do it." Belle nodded towards Robert.)
  • I can easily take out one in every four or so instances of "that" and not change anything but the word count.
  • If the sentence reads the same when I take out "just," then I should just take "just" out.
  • Whenever I write "was + a word that ends with -ing," I should just change it to that verb in imperfect tense. (Example: She was running. --> She ran.)

I know these rules, heck, I teach these rules...but for some reason, when I write, I forget them.

Revision update: Only 100 more pages to go. I might not get it all in the computer, but I will finish the paper revision before the New Year's ball drops!!!

New Year's Resolutions: Writer's Version

Goals are important. But it's also important to focus your goals on who you are and what you can do. So I'm going to make some writing resolutions that are all me. I'm not going to resolve to get published this year--I can only control that to a certain extent. Below are the things that I can do...and will do.

  • Attend another writing conference
  • Completely finish revisions on WIP and submit to agents/editors
  • Completely finish first draft of new WIP
  • Save money for the SCBWI NY conference
  • Continue networking in the writing community

So, what are your goals?

What I Learned

Is there really a difference between "Robert was muttering to Esperanza as Belle came closer," and "Robert muttered to Esperanza as Belle came closer."

Yes. Yes, there is.

*sigh* Back to cutting and rearranging and argh.

I Found Her

The perfect agent. There was a book I read recently that acknowledged her in the credits. I thought, "There might be something to this agent. This book isn't that different from mine." Then I decided to look up the agents of a few other authors who I know stack up nicely against my own manuscript.

And it was all the same agent.

You know you're a writer when you seriously consider stalking an agent.

But she's the one. The Dream Agent. The one I will query in 2009.

Tuesday, December 30, 2008

Man, This is Gonna Be Harder than I Thought

It'll be fine, I told myself. I'll have two weeks of vacation. Sure, the first week will be spent working on Christmas stuff--finishing presents, baking the last cookies, visiting relatives. But that leaves me with an entire week after that to work.

But, oh.

There's after-Christmas shopping (I got a new vaccuum for half off!), there's friends I've not seen in forever to visit (hi, Jennifer!), there's the veritable stack of wonderfully amazing books that I got for Christmas to read (including Graceling and The Hunger Games and the wonderful books that Vivian sent), there's the brand-spanking-new interwebs full of Facebook and LinkedIn and Cyanide and Happiness, there's the stack of dishes I've not done since Christmas Eve. And then yesterday, my friend told me about how the sequel to about the only video game I actually like, just came out (in case you're interested, the game is Kingdom Hearts--the only video game that I have ever liked enough to play twice, and one of the few I actually finished--and the sequel, which I bought yesterday, is Chain of Memories).

And then there's the book...just staring at me...and the calendar that's ticking closer and closer to December 31 and my goal to finish revisions.

Maybe it is a good thing that I don't have the luxury of quitting the day job and writing full time. I somehow think I'd be less productive with more time!!

Sunday, December 28, 2008

Do You Read Author's Notes?

Unless they're pages of acknowledgments, I love author's notes. The best (to me) are the ones that delve into history--I always like it when a book has something historical in it, a small detail or allusion, and the author reveals that in the notes.

There are a lot of historical and literary allusions in my book. I'm going to take a stab at writing an Author's Note at the end--put the real history in there, but keep it a bit light and funny.

1) Do you read author's notes? Would that be something you'd like to see in a book?

and

2) Do you think I should include that in a manuscript if I ever get a request?

Linkspam!

Oh, interwebs, I loves you. I finally have interwebs at home! No more using the school computer between cramming lit down little kiddie's brains! Whee!

So, of course, the first thing I did when we got that satellite dish tacked up on our chimney (the old one, not the one that was smoking), was to gorge myself on interwebs. I have not slept in many moons, but I have re-discovered the life-sucking entity known as YouTube.

And I found some cool stuff for the linkspam!

First: What? NOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Also: What? WTF? (but I must admit, if I ever became so successful that I had a perfume made out of one of my books, I would wear it daily, even if it did smell of freesia)

I am trying to find a text copy for this, but until then, you can dl it here: Neil Gaimon's "A Writer's Prayer" I like what he says about its creation:
A Writer's Prayer was written shortly before I began American Gods. I knew the first two verses when I began it, and the conclusion was there when I reached it. This is why I love writing.
Why, yes. I am behind my peers technologically. I have finally joined Facebook. I hesitated because MySpace made me feel like a pedophile--not that I am one, it's just so...uh...obviously aimed at angsty teenagers and inundated with teen porn--but Facebook is nice and not creepy.

Anyways, be my friend!

Saturday, December 27, 2008

Hopefully...

...I hope that I have interwebs now. That's the goal--but just in case something happened and I don't have interwebs, I might not be around for another week. Just lettin' ya know! I should be able to keep posting on twitter, though. *Sigh* I'm so addicted to technology.

Writer's Review: JK Rowling's Tales of Beedle the Bard

God, I'm jealous of JK Rowling. There's the millions, of course (dollars and fans and copies of books sold). But not only that--she also gets to write Tales of Beedle the Bard.

This is not a Harry Potter book--Harry's not in there at all, and the style isn't that of the HP books. Instead, this is a supplemental book (much like the "school books" JK published for charity--and btw, Tales is pubbed for charity, too). The Tales are mentioned in the last HP book--and here they are presented for all of us to read, too.

Take a moment and think about the enormity of this. She's creating her world on a whole new level. We don't have to imagine the book as we read the HP story--we can hold Tales in our hand and know exactly what Ron is talking about when he mentions Babbity Rabbity. This takes story creation and fictional worlds to a whole new level, and brings readers into the fictional world at a whole new amazing level.

And that's why I'm jealous. Her millions (of everything) aside, she gets to make her fictional world more alive than almost any other author in existence.

PS--This totally isn't the traditional Writer's Review I do...but how can I talk about style and structure? It's JK. Just go buy it and revel in the experience.

Wednesday, December 24, 2008

Writing Program Review: Scrivener

As a rule, I don't like writing programs. I find most of the stuff out there for writers to be a waste of time. Why bother with a writing program that can color code my notes when I could just write the book?

But Justine Larbalestier recommends Scrivener--very highly. As does Holly Black.

The Good:
  • Organization of notes and files, including pictures. If I want to describe a statue in my story, I've got the picture of it right there, one simple click away, and can go to it without minimizing or closing my writing.
  • Corkboard-style organization of chapters. I wrote brief synopses of each chapter on the "notecard" that is attached to it. Those notecards are automatically placed on a virtual corkboard in the order of the chapter--so I can see how the story is flowing, much like a story board, but with notes directly applied to each chapter in a logical way.
  • Easy to access notes. In the sidebar beside each chapter, I can write notes about the chapter, or I can write notes about the entire manuscript. Then, as I revise, I can check up on "fixing that scene with Ashleigh in the lunchroom" or I can make sure I "keep up with Audrey Hepburn theme and acting motivation."
  • Easy to use labels that mark a chapter as "done", "first draft", "needs work", etc. Now I know where to go to which chapter and can jump to that chapter easily.

The Bad:
  • I would really like to be able to have the folders auto-renumber to the chapters. I combined Chapters 1 and 2--which meant in my manuscript, the chapters went from 1 to 3. It would have been awesome if Scrivener automatically renumbered the chapters, but instead I have to go through and renumber them myself. There's a reason why this feature isn't there, but it's still a detracting factor for me.
  • Outdated manuscript formatting. Many agents say they no longer like Courior font (as it was used for typesetting in the past, but no longer), but that's the default font for the ms. format here. You can change it, but it's a pain. Also, the way the chapter breaks work is a little old fashioned. So I'm not using the manuscript format that comes with the program, but instead am using my own format.
In all, I think this program is worth it, and am seriously considering purchasing it after break (I'm in the month free trial now). However, it would have been easier to use if I had started writing with it, instead of putting it in after writing. I suspect the entire program will be much more beneficial if I use it with my new WIP, although the revision notes are helpful.

Tuesday, December 23, 2008

Unknown Lands

So, you've got a great idea for a story. It's awesome. But you need to set it in a country you've never been to. Ever. And you have no idea how to do it.

I'm not an expert on this at all, but here's some ideas that may or may not be helpful.

First: the tools you need:
  • Interwebs: This should be your first branch. Look for travel blogs, look at Wikipedia, look at Google images. Don't just find the pages of the tourism bureau; find real, authentic pictures by people who were there, and read real accounts from people who were there.
  • Travel Channel, NatGeo Channel, etc: Do not rely on the "easy" tourism channels. Samantha Brown can only help so much. Andrew Zimmerman will provide much more realistic detail.
  • Research the obscure: foods, language, customs. Never assume. Check out all details.
  • Don't underestimate Google Earth. Check out where your place is in location to everything else that's relevant--such as the equator, or the next closest city. Check out surface details, and see if the place you're using is popular enough to have street level views.
OK--so, how do you go about using all this research?

1. Identify what you need. In general, the foreign country is just setting--so you'll need all the typical things you'd need with setting.
  • Sight: Look up pictures of the place you want to write about--and don't just look up post-card pics. Look up real life pics taken by people who were there--get a sense of how crowded the place is, what the other things nearby are. For a fictional story I wrote about the Egyptian Pyramids, I looked up all the classic pictures of them--you know, the pretty ones.
  • But then I went on Google Earth and looked up where they were in relationship to Cairo--pretty close. Then I looked up blogs by people who had been to the pyramids on tours, and they talked about how abrupt the change from city to tourist trap was. These were all details I incorporated later.
  • Sound, Smell, Feeling: You're going to have to stretch your imagination here. What sounds would you hear in this setting? What smells? How would it feel? Logic works here--the pyramids would have sounds of many different languages as tourists talk, would smell of camels and an earthy scent of sand, would feel hot and dry. Look up facts--what kind of weather, temperature, etc. do you see?
  • PS--Don't be afraid to contact people. What does it hurt? Look up people who write travel blogs--just google it--and email them. Most people love to talk about their adventures and are thrilled to help.
2. Research the little details. One authentic small detail--especially a little known one, or a close observation--counts more than paragraphs of false description. So if your characters are sitting down to a meal, find a traditional recipe, recreate it at home, and describe that. If they have a holiday, research the details of that holiday and include that. Recreate as much as you can that doesn't come from a tour book--research the little, everyday stuff, and include that. That will make things much more authentic.

3. Don't focus on stuff you don't know. Need to write a story about two characters on the top of the Eiffel Tower, but have never been? If you can't find someone who knows what it's like and can describe it, or if you're not confident in your faking of it, then don't include it. Just say they're at the top of the Eiffel Tower, but don't add the details that you assume are true. Keep it simple.


...so, what exotic locations do you think you'll try? And how will you research them?

Monday, December 22, 2008

The Story of Inspiration: Malta

About half way through The Amnesia Door, I got stuck. It's not surprising. I'm not an outliner, and I tried to make a problem in my story (how to escape the Amnesia Door) so difficult that even I couldn't solve it...and I couldn't. The door was too good, and my characters couldn't figure out how to break it...but neither could I. (btw, the post about when I originally got stuck is here, seems like a long time ago, now)

When I first thought of the Amnesia Door, I pictured a bright electric blue door, something that totally stood out in the uniformity of a school. But as I was brainstorming the problem, I remember where the original idea for the door came from: Malta.

The brightly painted doors of Malta fascinated me!

I went to Malta my sophomore year of college, as part of a short exchange program through my university's education program. Ostentatiously, I and my fellow travelers were supposed to be evaluating Maltese education systems. But there were just three school visits, and the rest of our days were spent sight-seeing.

Click on the map for a larger image. Find the boot of Italy, then the island of Sicily. Malta is the speck below that.

Many of the doors in Malta were brightly painted, in every shade of the rainbow, and they all stood out in stark contrast to the uniform limestone walls. I loved it--I saw the doors as a mark of individuality for each home. So, naturally, when I started writing a story about doors, my memories of the Maltese doors came up. And then, when my story came to a screeching halt, I remembered the original inspiration for the door--Malta--and decided to send my characters there.

I always had the image of the forest of wands that I describe in the manuscript, but decided to put that forest of wands in Malta as a sort of homage to the painted door inspiration, and also just to get the characters moving. Where should I had a forest of wands? Well, I remembered on my tours that around the coast of Malta are large towers that were originally used as look-outs and warning posts. So, I incorporated the towers into the story, citing them as the secret entryway to the forest of wands.

Torri Hamrija, the Lookout Tower near the Hagar Qim archaeology digs.
In my story, the forest of wands is under the tower.

From my novel:
In the distance, nearly on the edge of the cliff overlooking the Mediterranean, stood a low, squat limestone tower of the same dusty yellow that the ruins seemed to be made of.

"That's Torri Ħamrijja," Mr. Mallory said. "One of thirteen towers made in the 1500s as a safe portal to the lignum vitae forests."

When I thought of the towers, I was immediately reminded of the archeology digs at Hagar Qim, one of my most favorite locations in Malta. There were links to my story here, too. I remembered vividly the carvings on the altars at the prehistoric temple--carvings of trees, just like the "wand forest" I had in my book.

A tree grows in Malta.

From my novel:
"Come over here," Mr. Mallory said, drawing Robert, Esperanza, and Belle away from the group that had swarmed around them and through a narrow porthole door carved into the stone. The room was small, and if it weren't for the fact that there was no roof, Belle would have felt trapped and closed in. The only thing of interest in the stark room was a pedestal-style table with a long, box-shape base that had a many-limbed tree carved into each of the four sides.
Not only were there carvings of trees, but the other prominent carving was of a spiral design that archaeologists think represented eternal life. This design became the same as my characters' alchemist mark, the magic symbol that marked them as alchemists.

Swirly!

From my novel:
He pointed to some relief carvings that popped out from the lower edge of a half-broken wall. They were spirals that made intertwining circles, like connected curlicues. "Recognize this?" Mr. Mallory asked.

They all shook their heads.

"Oh, come on," Mr. Mallory said, grinning at them. He held up his hand, which glowed under the sunlight.

"The alchemist mark?" Belle asked, looking from the symbol embedded deep within his palm to the carvings on the ancient wall.

When I thought of Hagar Qim, I couldn't help but think of the overall design. The pre-historics were clever. They worshipped a "Venus" character, a fat woman that represented fertility. The design of the building was shaped like the goddess they worshipped.

Artist rendition of the Hagar Qim temple design.


A sculpture of the Maltese Venus

This, of course, became the basis of the minor
character Fat Venus in my story. Here she is:
She was fat, grotesquely fat, but she seemed graceful nonetheless. Still, Belle couldn't help staring at the way the fat rolled over the woman's knees and elbows, at how there were three distinct rolls of fat underneath the woman's Grecian-style dress. Her breasts hung low wobbled as she walked.

There were other images from Malta that stood out in my memory. The streets of Mdina, the silent city, evoked powerful feelings of peace and goodness in me...so the first good alchemist introduced, Saul, comes from there.
Even in the most crowded parts of the city, it was quiet and peaceful.
You could absolutely lose yourself here.

From the novel:
They had yet to see any other people; Belle could hardly even hear any other people. All the streets were lovely and peaceful—but they were also deserted and labyrinthine, and the walls surrounding them rose several stories high, so high, in fact, that it was sometimes hard to see the sky.
And the capital city, Valleta, was beautiful and powerful. It was a strong city, as evidenced by the fort-turned-park that has an interesting tower:

Click for a closer look--ears and eyes are carved in the tower,
to symbolize a city that hears and see everything.


From the novel:
"Look," Esperanza whispered loudly, pointing to the tower in which the man stood. On each of the six sides of the tower—or at least, on each of the sides they could see (two sides hung over the wall, out of their site), a different object was carved. Over the man's head was carved a long-necked bird leaning over, its beak nearly at its feet. But to the left of him, there was a giant ear, and to the right, a giant eye. The giant eye blinked. Its stone pupil moved around, gazing at each member of the crowd in turn. The ear twitched nervously.

So, this is the story of how Malta influenced my story. What started as just a blue door developed into characters, setting, fantasy, and, ultimately, a whole new plot.

Sunday, December 21, 2008

Why We Aren't Doomed

(Disclaimer: most of these links came via Editorial Ass or The Swivet. Just givin' props here.)

There's been lots of doom-n-gloom in the publishing world lately. Lay-offs (Merry Christmas!), less books being published, random panic attacks at what might happen with scary technology and e-books...

But no worries. For serious, people, we live in an intellectual society whose history and thriving future depend upon the written word. Books are not going away. If anything, the advent of Harry Potter and sparklevires from Twilight shows an increase in popular fiction and an increase in young readers--and the more young readers reading, the better chances we have of getting paid for our scratches on paper.

Here's my (entirely un-authoritative) take on it all:
  • Doom: E-books will take over the world and destroy publishing! Reality: Good. It's about damn time.
    • Kindle looks awesome. I want one. I want a second generation one, and I want to carry it around with me and open it up randomly and hope people comment on it so that I can snobbily say, "Oh, this? This is an e-reader. There are books in here. I carry my library with me like a snail carries his home. Why, yes, I am that intellectual."
    • Here's the thing: we are moving into a technological era. This is a good thing. It is good that books and the publishing world is keeping up with. And, unlike the music industry that totally screwed up file sharing, we're at the ground level with ebooks and are developing e-readers (such as Kindle) that are efficiently designed for our needs and developing the methods in which books are shared electronically. In other words, books aren't getting blindsided like the music industry was with the introduction of mp3 players. We're at the ground level and in a unique opportunity to make e-books popular and viable new outlets for writing.
    • E-books are another form of publishing. More e-books = more of your written work out there = wider exposure = wider audience = more people read your books = you sell more books.
    • Possible doom of the future: DRM and unfair prices on e-books (both of which will develop literary piracy).
  • Doom: The publishing houses are closing/laying off/losing business/will DIE! Reality: Good. It's about damn time.
    • Here's the thing. The way publishing works now doesn't work. The fact that a bookseller can return an author's book with no repercussions at all means that they can order as many books as they want, then get their money back on what doesn't sell, then throw away the left-overs. Which is a waste of money for the publishers in both production and shipping. And when the publisher makes less money, the author makes less money. It's a never-ending cycle of wasted resources, or, as Richard Curtis put it: "...the consignment system of selling books is bleeding the publishing industry to death. Try as they might, the smartest people in our field have failed to find a way to make money under an arrangement that makes books returnable to publishers."
    • Editorial Ass has blogged many times about this topic, and it makes sense. As long as the book stores, publishers and authors are ultimately working against each other, each looking out only for their own profit, we will continue to have crashes like the one we had in October. But because of these continuing crashes, the publishing industry will change--for the better, in ways that are more profitable for all involved. In fact...
    • ...it's already begun. HarperStudio will sell books to Borders on a non-returnable basis. This means that the HS books that Borders buys, the store cannot return to the publisher. Which means that the store won't buy more stock than it can sell just because it can. Which means that stock won't be returned to HS when it isn't sold, which means less shipping costs and less waste in destroying the unsold books. Which does mean that Borders may end up with some unsold books...which will then be sold at a clearance price--and while that means the book is cheaper and profits the bookstore less, it also means the book is sold and might develop a larger audience and fan base (and more future customers). Everyone wins
So what are we all worried about? Publishing isn't sinking--but it is changing. And the changes are for the better. Like any change, it can hurt. Especially for those in the publishing industry who have lost their jobs, those new writers (like me) who might not get as fair a chance from hesitant agents/editors, and those newly acquired writers who might get lost in the shuffle. But change must happen...and will lead to an even stronger, more thriving publishing industry for the future.

Saturday, December 20, 2008

And now I'm Twittering...

...gonna see how this works out. Trial twitterings begin now! (Check out sidebar for update)

Thanks Again...

Thanks again to everyone who helped me with my revision of Chapter 1. I just submitted it to the Firebrand Literary Agency first Query Holiday. For the rest of break, I plan on finishing my final rounds of revisions. Here's hoping!

Holiday Break!

Yes! Holiday break is officially broke--I'm off for two weeks! The dog, as you can see, is happy, too: when I'm off, he gets to stay inside with me, instead of outside in the freezing cold. He is amenable to this situation.

Updates are going to be a little sporadic in the coming weeks, and commenting may cease, depending on whether or not I get the interwebs for a Christmas present to myself. Just FYI.

Friday, December 19, 2008

Pitch Opportunity

BookEnds is giving a great gift to its blog readers: a chance to have your pitch critiqued by the agents. Go sign up for it now! And, for the curious, here's my latest revision of my own pitch (edited first sentences):

Belle Ravenna thought starting eighth grade meant change. Maybe class bully Ashleigh would move on to another victim, gorgeous Matt would finally notice her, or, at the very least, she’d make some real friends. But of all the changes Belle hoped for, she never dreamed of how much she would change after discovering that her new English teacher was a witch.

Magical Ms. Wendt may be able to have Sophocles as a guest speaker, but she can’t escape the prison of her own classroom. Trapped behind an enchanted blue door that alters her students’ memories of magic, Ms. Wendt has little hope of rescue—although Belle and her classmates want to help their teacher, they only recall her imprisonment within the classroom. When the new science teacher introduces the kids to alchemy, Belle thinks that may be the key to saving Ms. Wendt. The more Belle learns about alchemy, though, the more she suspect that her science teacher wants to use it to steal Ms. Wendt’s magic…and if she helps, she’ll get some of that magic for her own. Caught between one teacher who wants freedom and another who wants magic, Belle must choose between fighting for what she thinks is right and taking what she knows she wants.

Based loosely on the Greek myth of Bellerophon, The Amnesia Door is a 70k word MG novel intended for tween girls.

Thursday, December 18, 2008

The Blood-Red Pencil

I recently found this copy-editing blog, and one post jumped out at me. It's all about empty fillers in your writing. Here's some examples they used:
When Rachel stared at her, Lina blinked and cocked her head, then groaned.

Lara smirked at Betty, then shook her head and grinned.
Now, I asked myself, what's wrong with those? They're descriptive, give me a sense of what the character was doing...what's wrong? How is that filler?

Well, to be honest, it's not entirely filler....but it's still not good writing. There's nothing new there. And you might not realize how tired those adjectives and verbs are until you look at a passage that actually is innovative:
Then, like a dog hearing a sound on some inaudible frequency, he cocked his head. (Katherine V. Forrest, Daughters of an Amber Dawn, 2002)
That's better. It's fine if your character cocks her head to listen--but add something else, make it something more--make it something new.

Haiku Contest

Justus posted a heads up about a contest agent Rachelle Gardner posted--write a haiku about writing or Christmas for a chance at either a $20 Amazon gift card or (!!) a ten page crit. It's fun--here's my entry:

So easy to write
A plethora of new words
But cutting them--oh!

Go enter!

The Morning After

Last night, I started playing around with Scrivener. I was up past midnight, fiddling with the settings, formatting the documents, etc. And when I woke up this morning, it was not a meet-the-sunshine-with-a-smile kind of wake-up. See, random words, paragraphs, and even whole chapters had been "eaten" by the program. There was nothing but big blank white spots throughout the whole thing...and I couldn't get the deleted stuff back. I drove my 40 minute drive to work with the thought of all the work I had fixing my manuscript plaguing my mind. Could I remember the turns of phrase I used? Could I replace what was lost--and would it be as good as the original?

As I put my key into my classroom door, I suddenly realized...

...none of that had happened. It had all been a nightmare that I had last night after staying up too late working on the manuscript. My pages hadn't been deleted, my manuscript was perfectly fine, and I was ready to throw myself off a bridge because of a particularly realistic memory of a dream.

Whew!

Wednesday, December 17, 2008

Linkspam!

Andrew Karre at Carolrhoda Books is opening submissions for YA novels for a short time. If you're ready with that YA novel, click here to submit. It sounds like a good opportunity.

Miss Snark's First Victim's latest contest: your worst sentence ever.

James Patterson's got a website up with book recommendations for kids. I
t's well organized and features some new, unusual voices. I'm finding lots of new books in my target age range and genre that I'm going to check out for "research."

What's to Come...

For the next three days, I'm going to be writing and scheduling posts for the two-and-a-half-week Christmas break (I love teaching! ...but wait until finals, then I won't love it any more). So the posts should go up, but little commenting will ensue :)

So, upcoming:
  • A post about the writing program Scrivener (just downloaded it and plan on exploring it over break)
  • A post about locations as inspiration
  • A post about researching and using foreign locations if you've never been there before (thanks, Lady Glamis!)
  • A review of JK Rowling's new book, The Tales of Beedle the Bard
  • A post about how publishing isn't dead and we all shouldn't run for the trees (thanks, Angela!)
  • I'll have a review of Magyk after the break...I probably won't finish reading it until then...
  • And a post about frogs! (just kidding!)

Am I Caught Up?

I only realized today that I had missed returning a critique to someone. Am I missing anyone else? Please let me know if I've dropped the ball! I fell behind a swarm of emails and would hate to accidentally ignore someone!

Tuesday, December 16, 2008

What do YOU want?

I am going to have a bit of free time in the next couple of days, and thought I'd get some posts scheduled. I will have little to no internet access next week and the week after, but would like to keep posts going at least on a limited basis.

So...what kinds of things would you like me to post about? Are there any topics out there that you're particularly interested in? I'm certainly not an expert, but I'm all for doing a bit of research and digging.

Monday, December 15, 2008

How Much for E-Books?

Galleycat just posted an article on the pricing of e-books, which is really just a report on this original article.

It raises some good points. How much should e-books cost the consumer? There's certainly little to no production or holding costs. But it's important for the book price to be a fair assessment of the value.

The article makes a good comparison of used books to e-books, and draws this (accurate) conclusion:
...the sensible reader will know which books get put on a library list and which books they buy—and that won’t be to hardback-priced best-sellers infested with DRM.
Here's my take:
  • E-books cost very little on the publisher's end
  • E-books provide me as a consumer with very little--there's no book on my shelf, in the end
  • E-books are not that convenient; the average person has a laptop, not a e-reader
  • Pirating is much more likely with higher prices
  • DRMs will drive pirating up, not down
  • The easier (in convenience and cost) it is to buy an e-book, the more that will be sold
  • The more e-books sold, the more paper books sold
  • ...therefore, E-book should be sold for no more than $5, and should be as easy to download as technologically possible!
What do you think? How much should e-books cost? Why?

Author Photo Shoot!

I recently had an article published in my local SCBWI chapter's magazine, Pen and Palette, which is available online for SCBWI-C members. They wanted a picture of me to put beside the article and shudder. See, I'm usually the one behind the camera, so I have very few recent pics of me. And I'm just not that photogenic--and it doesn't help that I'm aware of the fact that I'm not photogenic, because then I always put on this fake smile or something when I see a camera coming at my face. So when P&P asked for a pic, I had to take one quick using my Apple laptop's built in camera and...well, let's just say I decided this weekend that I needed a photo shoot. I needed a picture of myself that wasn't taken after a long hard day of beating literature into youths' minds.

I love digital cameras. Then you can take 1,000 pictures--which is about how many the husband had to take before I found a picture of myself I actually liked. It's this one, and the only reason I don't have on a fake smile and one eye crossed is because he surprised me with the camera as I was coming out from behind the tree.

So there it is, my semi-professional at least I'm not cross-eyed-and-drooling picture! And I actually liked this picture so much that I tried to re-create it, and came out looking like a hair model.



And that's it! My adventure in photography!

Saturday, December 13, 2008

The Story of Inspiration: Audrey Hepburn and Ms. Wendt

I very rarely have an image of a specific person in mind when I write a character. If I base a character on a person, I usually base that character on myself--not in an autobiographical way, but my main character usually has my outlook on life or a particular interest, etc.

With this last manuscript, there was one character who did have a specific inspiration. Ms. Wendt--the witchy teacher of the kids. And while her teaching style came pretty much from me, there was another inspiration for her:


How can anyone not be inspired by her?


When I thought about this character, the Audrey Hepburn inspiration came gradually. I didn't intend for it to happen. It started with description. I wanted a character who had an almost ethereal beauty, and since Audrey's always been my ideal, I described Ms. Wendt in that way. In my mind, she looked like this:

Audrey Hepburn in the movie Sabrina.

So, my description of Ms. Wendt ended up like this:
Although short, she stood up so straight that she seemed taller. Her close cropped hair framed her pixie face, but although she looked delicate, her eyes held a fierce flash that belied gentleness.
But although Ms. Wendt appears small and gentle (like Audrey), I wanted her to have an element of sadness and sorrow. And then I remembered this:


Breakfast is better with diamonds.

To me, this scene has always been one of the saddest scenes Audrey ever played--because it's sadness without words. You see her longing and sorrow in her face, her eyes, her movement--but she doesn't say it. This is the epitome of show, not tell. When writing Ms. Wendt, I really strove to show her sorrow long before she ever revealed why she was sad. It came out like this:
Belle watched her teacher's face pale for just a moment before her features froze into a perfect smiling mask. ...[later] Something—a look of sadness? Anger?—passed over Ms. Wendt's face.
During revisions, I became aware of how heavily I was using my image of Ms. Wendt as Audrey. I added this scene as a sort of homage to it all:
She looked just like Audrey Hepburn had in Breakfast at Tiffany's, at the beginning of the movie, when Audrey's character ate a bagel in front of the store window of Tiffany's jewelry store, and her stony face tried to hide a deep, almost painful longing for a life she would never, ever have.

In many ways, Audrey Hepburn grew to represent much more than just Ms. Wendt's physical appearance in the novel. In my revisions, I gave the main character, Belle, something of an Audrey Hepburn obsession. I did this for several reasons. By that point, I identified Ms. Wendt so closely with Audrey Hepburn that Belle's obsession with the actress gradually shifted to an obsession with Ms. Wendt--Belle originally wants to be like Audrey, then wants to be like Ms. Wendt. But Audrey represented for both of these characters certain attributes that they both (unconsciously) shared.
Being alone--Ms. Wendt and Belle both consider themselves solitary characters.

Although both Belle and Ms. Wendt feel alone, they also both have a sense of being surrounded by others.
Belle describes it as , "It was as if everyone else was flying, and she was slogging through water."


There is also a sense of giving up things for both characters. Ms. Wendt has given up freedom,
but Belle feels that she is giving up her chance of happiness and magic. There is a bit of the martyr in each.

And finally, each of the two feel a stoic sense of responsibility.
They do the right thing, even though it doesn't feel good.
They don't pretend it's easy or makes them happy--they just do it.

In the end, I don't think that many readers will pick up on how great an influence Audrey Hepburn as both a character and a person made on my work. It's subtle, but things from physical descriptions to motivation to attitude were all influenced to an extent by this amazing woman. This is how inspiration works best for me. If I had gone into the work trying to make Ms. Wendt be Audrey Hepburn or obviously linking together characters' internal attitude to her, I think the work would have been weaker. Because it developed gradually, naturally, it worked much better within my own writing.

So, how about you? What kinds of people/things/places inspire you?

Friday, December 12, 2008

Statistics and Numbers for Friday

Editorial Anonymous just posted about an interesting topic--a year-in review, if you will, of her slush pile.
  • 15,000 manuscripts in slush
  • 50% were "inappropriate, illiterate, or crazy"
  • 47% were "just poorly-written, or aimed at the wrong age level, or derivative of much better (and better-known) writers, as well as having several concept/plotting/arc issues"
  • 3% were "nice, but manuscripts that no consumer was going to spend her money on when she's got so many other choices"
  • .02%--3 of the original 15,000--were worthy of publication at her house

This is more than a little depressing. .02% of her slush was published at her house?! That's depressing for the editor and the writer!

But... I don't think I'm in the first 50%. After that last SCBWI conference, where I met crazy, I know I ain't crazy (not that crazy). And I'm not illiterate, and while my book is dark at times, I don't think it's inappropriate. So, I'm better than half! The next 47% is a bit rougher. I don't think my book is poorly written, at least, it won't be after the revisions. And the one thing everyone agrees on is that the age range is gold. I don't think my work is derivative at all--it's certainly not intentionally derivative, and I've not heard of any similar works (and actually struggle to find comparisons with it). So, bets are that I'm past that 47%, too.

So, 97% of 15,000 = 14,550. So, yay! I'm better than 14,550!

Um, but that leaves 450.

Now the remaining 450, that last 3% were nice but not marketable. And, realistically, I might be in that range. But 2 of the remaining 450 were publishable. Heck, I'm willing to say that more than the 2 were publishable--it's just that 2 were publishable for that house. Even so, my odds are a lot better at being 1 of the 450 than 1 of 15,000.

So, while those stats do seem pretty bleak...they actually aren't that bad!