tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post7767736254697318065..comments2024-02-27T07:05:52.851-05:00Comments on Beth Revis: Using External and Internal Conflict to Create a PitchAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11431700962951592287noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-79847168901279176582009-04-15T00:30:00.000-04:002009-04-15T00:30:00.000-04:00I love your story. Can you move the murder to page...I love your story. Can you move the murder to page one? :)<br /><br />Actually, agree with Rebecca. Finish it and then cut and move around. No, actually do whatever works for you!PJ Hooverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02602205868934777662noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-91792441823751166722009-04-14T22:37:00.000-04:002009-04-14T22:37:00.000-04:00Beth, you have just use an really effective hook. ...Beth, you have just use an really effective hook. I keep hearing people say they start with a hook and I don't get the hook, but your was very good.About Mehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10011023963327391019noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-28753948746289714322009-04-14T20:46:00.000-04:002009-04-14T20:46:00.000-04:00That's a VERY juicy internal conflict! I like it t...That's a VERY juicy internal conflict! I like it to pieces. Your whole story sounds interesting, but I particularly like the internal conflict. <br /><br />Nice post! I've done stuff like this to help me understand my own book as well. And, the best part is that you end up starting your query letter before you feel the pressure to do so. It's win-win.Davin Malasarnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09385823575081492949noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-20204382892484645352009-04-14T13:45:00.000-04:002009-04-14T13:45:00.000-04:00Don't fret. Finish the book, then go back and see...Don't fret. Finish the book, then go back and see what you can take out. As an exploration writer, I always have to cut out most of my first half. When I write I like to develop tone for several chapters before I dive into the story, but then I cut those chapters in later drafts. Sometimes this is painful surgery because I LOVE some of the stuff I come up with on the fly.Rebecca J. Carlsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13266492065285468391noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-35048408418722205132009-04-14T11:02:00.000-04:002009-04-14T11:02:00.000-04:00AHA!!!! I knew there was a terrible secret. And I ...AHA!!!! I knew there was a terrible secret. And I think I know who!!!! But maybe not. AUGH! You love this suspense thing, don'tcha?? <br /><br />It looks like a great way to see that you have to cut, but be very careful in what you cut when that time comes! :)Robyn Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17356555082768185840noreply@blogger.com