tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post2964257217444517268..comments2024-02-27T07:05:52.851-05:00Comments on Beth Revis: The Blood-Red PencilAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11431700962951592287noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-22280479103835986842008-12-20T15:05:00.000-05:002008-12-20T15:05:00.000-05:00Yesterday I told the manager at my workplace about...Yesterday I told the manager at my workplace about something bizarre that had happened, and she didn't just cock her head.<BR/><BR/>She turned it ninety degrees sideways. I didn't know that was humanly possible, and I thought for a moment that she was going to break her neck. Maybe what I had told her was Just. That. Bad.<BR/><BR/>She lived, though, and went on to help me solve the problem. I think she's just really, really flexible. Either that or a Terminator.<BR/><BR/>Totally off topic, I know :( but your post just made me think of that moment.Marian Pererahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15700524210146863718noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-8037825387826732542008-12-19T10:41:00.000-05:002008-12-19T10:41:00.000-05:00Great advice, and that looks like an interesting s...Great advice, and that looks like an interesting site. Thanks for the info!Adriennehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05583029102450754497noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-58629464537747706062008-12-19T08:44:00.000-05:002008-12-19T08:44:00.000-05:00Thanks Viv! And welcome Beth--you've got a great ...Thanks Viv! And welcome Beth--you've got a great first name, by the way :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11431700962951592287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-47530155277601665572008-12-19T07:46:00.000-05:002008-12-19T07:46:00.000-05:00Thank you, Beth, for stopping by. Which encourage...Thank you, Beth, for stopping by. Which encouraged me to stop by. Which gave me reason to read this fine post. From which I have learned (again) something important.Beth Kepharthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14236487532413398431noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-9254862278799695702008-12-19T07:37:00.000-05:002008-12-19T07:37:00.000-05:00Good post, Beth! Thanks for this tip to help our ...Good post, Beth! Thanks for this tip to help our manuscripts sing!Vivian Mahoneyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11285339307161020541noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-78218895121639663672008-12-19T07:02:00.000-05:002008-12-19T07:02:00.000-05:00worried = worriesIt's too early.Must drink more Re...worried = worries<BR/><BR/>It's too early.<BR/><BR/>Must drink more Red Bull.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11431700962951592287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-63699820957488701842008-12-19T06:58:00.000-05:002008-12-19T06:58:00.000-05:00No worried, PJ!And Justus--Ha! Going to bed like a...No worried, PJ!<BR/><BR/>And Justus--Ha! Going to bed like a pancake on a cloudy day!! Brilliant! :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11431700962951592287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-8154958992326729902008-12-18T22:47:00.000-05:002008-12-18T22:47:00.000-05:00"When Rachel stared at her, Lina blinked and ..."When Rachel stared at her, Lina blinked and cocked her head, then groaned."<BR/><BR/>I think the main problem here has nothing to do with cocking. It's way too many verbs! Yes, I said it -> verbs. <BR/><BR/>Like this: As Julie smiled at me, I raised an eyebrow and laughed, then grinned. <BR/><BR/>Wait...does that seem better than the quoted sentence?<BR/><BR/>Fine, I give up. :'( Maybe it is them ole "simile" fellows.<BR/><BR/>Don't worry about me. I'm going to bed like a pancake on a cloudy day. ;) Night!Bowmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11031226145526664876noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-13724398258574980742008-12-18T21:42:00.000-05:002008-12-18T21:42:00.000-05:00Hey! This is great advice! I love it!Thanks!Hey! This is great advice! I love it!<BR/>Thanks!PJ Hooverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02602205868934777662noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-45492357882503705292008-12-18T16:03:00.000-05:002008-12-18T16:03:00.000-05:00Welcome, Jill! I tried to fix my adverbs with too...Welcome, Jill! I tried to fix my adverbs with too many gerund phrases...and now have to cut them, too! It's a never ending cycle...<BR/><BR/>And, oh, yeah! I am so looking forward to Christmas!!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11431700962951592287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-40204744803832119032008-12-18T15:28:00.000-05:002008-12-18T15:28:00.000-05:00I'm horrible about this stuff! Like Lady Glamis, ...I'm horrible about this stuff! Like Lady Glamis, I'm editing, and cutting words like crazy. All of my people look at each other happily, sadly, curiously, pointedly. Agh! Enough!<BR/><BR/>Thanks for stopping by my blog. I also teach HS English. Isn't it fun? Time for Christmas break!Jill Wheelerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15059527254551768150noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-54356927256892348422008-12-18T13:25:00.000-05:002008-12-18T13:25:00.000-05:00Glamis--Yeah, I'm editing, too...and...ARGH!Sheri-...Glamis--Yeah, I'm editing, too...and...ARGH!<BR/><BR/>Sheri--I like to keep it fresh and sparkly, like my favorite hair commercials! :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11431700962951592287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-87704769039966282542008-12-18T13:23:00.000-05:002008-12-18T13:23:00.000-05:00My goodness, you're prolific! I turn around for fi...My goodness, you're prolific! I turn around for five seconds and you have a thousand new posts! I can't keep up with you. LOVE the hair model photo! Your comments made me crack up!Sheri Perl-Oshinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08025716805041579831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-32474148420529589242008-12-18T11:44:00.000-05:002008-12-18T11:44:00.000-05:00Thank you, Beth! I'm currently editing, and this i...Thank you, Beth! I'm currently editing, and this is one of the things that I'm working on. Last time I edited, I cut thousands of words worth of filler... ugh!Michelle D. Argylehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09696465137285587646noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-70863392679077143632008-12-18T11:41:00.000-05:002008-12-18T11:41:00.000-05:00Cut out the cliche similes, and don't overuse adve...Cut out the cliche similes, and don't overuse adverbs with dialog tags. Keep the stuff that makes your ms. unique!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11431700962951592287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7164206822403278866.post-86745749983708107552008-12-18T11:22:00.000-05:002008-12-18T11:22:00.000-05:00but I keep hearing to cut out the similes and the ...but I keep hearing to cut out the similes and the adverbs etc. What's a gal to do?lotusgirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06663641163048764869noreply@blogger.com